Wednesday 21 September 2011

save the most beautiful creature around you

Nowadays, many animals have disappeared from the earth whether by (because of) natural reasons or human's hands, particularly the extinct endangered animals which we need to pay more attention to to protect them from vanishing. ( I know it's strange, but sometimes two the same prepositions can be placed next to each other. I'll try to explain. We say - to pay attention to something. In your structure the preposition 'to' goes to the end, it can't just disappere.) Extinct animals are animals that have already died, so we can't protect them from vanishing, while endangered animals are creatures that still exist, but at the same time they are in danger of extinction.

In fact, I disagree with the idea that animals have been created to serve human beings so that we have the right to do whatever we want on with them. I strongly support the claim that extinct(?????) species will only be saved if the public have changed its behaviors such as destroying lands and hunting. (or I think extinct species would have been saved if the public had changed its behaviors)
As an excuse of for devastating forests in order to build buildings, flats, factories and farms many people.....(The way your wrote this sentences is not correct. I started the new one and you can continue)


Accordingly, lands shrink and animals are exposed to the danger of nature , risking to be without shelters.



Furthermore, if people do not take animals' homes, then they spoil their lands by producing the factories garbage, dirt and poisons. As a result, that led(??? maybe leads) to a massacre (???) of animals at in the end.

Besides, Land detriment, haunting is another element which helps make animals to disappear.

Also, Ivory trade aids to reduce the number of African elephants to 400,000 the by the end of the century.

In summary, we have to stop demolishing forests, which are the homes of animals, and hunting animals to save endangered species then keep the balance on the earth. We should not forget that we still need them in our meals. In my opinion, protecting those animals is not a person's duty but it is the accountability of all human beings.

We should not forget that we still need them in our meals.---- THIs point is just killing me. What do mean, actually? As I understand, the main point of your essay is that humanity should be concerned about other living beings and try to save our planet, and then you said that we need them only to eat their meat!? So, are you saying that we have to take care of animals to use them then? Just explain, please. It's not very clear to me.

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